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dirty nails and handshakes by ~asunder:iconasunder:



Without Annie, the world would lose its glimpse
Of water wars and fantasies of dining with the moon.
A glass of wine, of apple green, and a slice of golden cheese.
A bread crumb of a speck of risk of getting caught red-handed.

Annie: that quiet scroll of sanctities and preclusive love.
A dreamer, of sorts, with her head in the clouds of dust
Of busy bees and tall trees looming before the stack of ants.
Annie: a tiny drop of iodine on test-strips of sweet virginity.

An autumn curl of October rust, brushed against a pearl of ivory sunrise.
The twinkling pole of the carribean blue giving insight to the core.
A clock of ice that ticks in the warmth of a summer's womb.
The burgundy sprite gleaming and boasting of forbidden fruits and guilty passions.

Annie: a burning library of abandoned paths and hints of tall tales.
A vanilla malt half-full; left on the checkers of long-gone picnics.
The character of moss under brittle nails, picked up along the way.
The naivete of a missing hand, the other in a pocket.
©2004-2009 ~asunder
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hmmmm....I don't think I can write very well..poetry or essays or anything really.. but I thought this was cute :)

I wrote it in my best friend ~ wearyfeelingail's warm and comfy bed :)

This is for you, Poopie!
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I think I should draw her :)
Beautiful poem, I'm no good at commenting on poetry but I just want to say you've described her so amazingly, good stuff:D
and I second that (drawing her)
:jawdrop: i love it! you are very eloquent~

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Go find a cheerleader and saw her legs off.
dang, not a bad poem at all, i really liked it.

you should draw her
you should let me draw her :)
Autumn Annie....

I hope you do draw her :)

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catherine brown | browncat.us | browncat.dA
"Annie: a tiny drop of iodine on test-strips of sweet virginity."

That line... I don't know. It sticks out as even more beautiful than the rest. I definitely think you should draw her.

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when i look down
i just miss all the good stuff
and when i look up
i just trip over things
absolutly brilliant. :claps:

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Through me the way into the suffering city, Through me the way to the eternal pain, Through me the way that runs among the lost. Before me nothing but eternal things were made, And I endure eternally. Abandon all hope, ye who enter here.....
You writre very well, so stop worrying about it and use that pencil pen or keyboard, besides the only one you actually HAVE to please with your work is yourself.

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:blackrose:
An autumn curl of October rust, brushed against a pearl of ivory sunrise. That's beautiful, just lovely really. I like the whole thing actually, but that's my favorite bit. Your poetry's imagery is reminiscent of some of your other work and that's really cool.

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~peirrot, `mooncalfe, *niviswinter, and ~fallenzero rock my socks so hard...
aawwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww cwwwiiisssstinnaaa! i wuv you!

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